8月22号考啊~帮忙看看啊~！@

   我的英语不怎么好   9月12就考了   希望老师能给予修改   帮助学生提高非常感谢

题目:  Salaries paid to employees are an accurate reflection of their value to society. What is your opinion?  In approaching this task, consider in particular salaries paid to nurses, doctors, sports-persons, movie stars, teachers and farmers.

  With the rapid development of science and technology. There are many kinds of jobs in the world. Now, the wage gap has long been an issue debated mainly in people's life around the world and the money that people earn also show their value to society.
   Education, environment and expriences are the main reasons that cause wage gap. Nonetheless, some argue that chance is the most important reason. One example is that taking movies is always decided by chances. If someone is lucky, he will be chosen to take movies. Others chose to do other job.
   However, many reseachers maintain that movie shats are famous because of their skills, the chance is a small part. If a person is chosen to take character of one movie, but he has never learnt how to take movie, he doesn't have the environment of movie. like other movie stars, and he doesn't exprience the process of taking movies. This person will not success, even though the had chance. He doesn't have any skills about movies.
   The money that employees earn is the reflection of their value to society. Movie stars and sports-persons can earn a lot of money, because they can bring huge benefits to their company. One sports' game or one movie can earn lots of money from the audience.Doctors and nurses can't make lots of money for the hospital, so they can't make such mounts of money as movie stars and sports-persons. The calue of movie stars and sports-persons are bigger than doctor and nurses. Teachers and farmers also have low value to society, because their jobs don't have such big value as idols.
    To sum up, different people have different jobs. They all have their own value to the society. It's diffcult to break the wage gap. Education, environment and exprience are the main reasons of wage gap. Wage gap must exists in the world because of different people's to the society.

楼主不好意思  楼上发错了   上面的文章已经在之前发过了  下面的才是新的

9月12号就要考了  麻烦老师帮忙批改   谢谢了    非常感谢

题目:  Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer.

   As we all know that there are more than 100 thousand universities in the world. The knowledge that tought be university has become a important question for people. Some like to learn knowledge and skills that needed in the workplace, some argue that knowledge for its own sake is more important, whether the course can be used in the future. Personally, I perfer to choose the knowledge and skills for the job.

  Foundation always be thought as a most important thing for a student. Some argue that learning knowledge that hasn't relation to job is more important. One example is that the people who have gotten high level education and have learnt lots of knowledge are smarter than the people who haven't learnt much knowledge. They can do better in the workplace because of their knowledge.

  Many researchers maintain that the knowledge for universities sake isn't useful in the workplace. Experience, innovation and practical ability are the most important for the job. Most of the adults who had graduated from universities have forgotten the knowledge that learned from the universities, and they only used the several times. On the other hand, the extracurricular and the social practise activities are remembered clearly in their mind.

  The skills and knowledge needed in the workplace are more important. The purpoes for learning knowledge is trying to do well in the workplace. If students chose what they want to be in the future and learn some knowledge and practise some activities that are needed in the workplace, they will not make many mistakes in the workplace and they can make more contribution to the society. This is what society needs.

  In conclusion, the examples and ideas above can show the skills and knowledge for the workplace can fit well for the way of today's society. Therefore, all the universities should teach the skills and knowledge about which job the students will do in the future. The society will be improved faster.

第二期有没有开始呀？ 好兴奋有这样的机会呀~我先把我作文贴这啦~

题目

Some people think children who are brought up in families without a large amount of money are better prepared to solve the problems in their adult years than children brought up in wealthy families. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

正文

In contemporary society, with the rapid development of economy and industry, the financial condition is much better than before, but what the influence for children? Some people tend to believe that children grow up in poor families can resolve problems better than they are in affluent families. In my country, this phenomenon truly exists. So personally, I agree with this viewpoint, while I would qualify it to some extent.

It is evident that children in poor families have to think about more troubles. More exactly, because of the impoverish, sometimes something are hard to deal with or come true.. Under this condition, they should find another more difficult or complex way to cope with all the stuff. Needless to say, through those experience the can study more knowledge and skills to manage themselves. By contrast, rich families own enough money to provide their children perfect conditions to study or live. They don’t need to worry about school fees, future, university, even marriage, because their parents maybe have arranged already. Thus due to those factors, children in rich families cannot be cultivated enough for these abilities.

On the other hand, lots of facts have proved that some students in affluent families can also cope with matters well. It depends on parenting education. Some good parents give opportunities to their children to solve problems on purpose, and that is a good way to cultivate children. Furthermore, children’s awareness of values is also a crucial factor. When a child know money is not omnipotent, they will have more motivation to address troubles by themselves.

Surely, most children in impoverished families can learn more skills and abilities, even how to earn for living, and the cause of which are the surroundings, friends and family. However, if there is a good parenting education, children in every family can become successful people in their adult year despite the finance.

The first line curve above depicts trends in the price of steel in the whole world from 1985 to 2000. through the information that is represented in this column chart ,we can know the top of five area in the word of steel productors

As is represented in the first diagram , the price of steel have increase swiftly over six period from 1985 to 1991. on the contrary , there was a marketed decline in the next two years ,ranging between 450 $ and just over 210$ . From 1993 to 1995 ,the rate of growth speed up . the figure peak in 500$ . the most noteworthy decline was recorded in the period between 1995 and 1998 where the price of steel fell dramatically from around 500 to approximately 200 . from that moment on , this appear to have started to remain stable between 1998 and 2000 with only a slight  fluctuation from 200$ to fewer to 250$ .

According to the second diagram ,as to the number of steel productors , china was the number 1 with 120 million , it is a three-fold as much as that in German , Japan and USA followed closed bebind China at 100 million ,Russia being number 3 with 64 million

老师你好 我是29号考试的，现在只剩几天了，希望你尽快帮我修改指正作文中的不足，十分感谢你

Topic: Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life.

Which do you consider to be the major influence?

There is study suggesting that our innate characteristics have more of an impact on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our later lifetime. However, I do not agree with this point of view, that is to say, in my opinion, personal experiences in life have much more influence on our personality.

First of all, I think how a person is born is one thing, and how he/she is to develop is another. There is a Chinese saying that “Everyone is born good”, which means we are born kind. If we are influenced more by the characteristic we are born with, why are so many bad guys, such as thieves, robbers and murderers living in the world nowadays? In such case, I hold that we develop depending more on the environment where we grow up and the ups and downs which we experience in life.

What is more, some people may be born evil, but they can change for the better by discipline and education. Generally speaking, men are born with an ability of recognition so that people can learn new things they come across and take lessons from their mistakes. Therefore people are able to develop themselves in an appropriate direction and get converted.

In addition, some substantial experiences, for example, marriage, loss of a beloved one, or a severe disease may have a profound effect on an individual all his life. A man may be born lazy, and keeps his mother do the laundry from when he was a boy until his marriage and even after he is married. As the mother becomes old and passes away eventually, he has to face the truth and finally grow up. Although only up to then does he realize that he should be independent and get rid of laziness, he still rebuild his personality successfully by his life experience.

To sum up, the experience we may have in our life act as the major influence in the process of one’s personality development.

第二期什么时候好啊

老师，您好！我9月26日将参加雅思的G类考试，但是自己的写作一直都是弱项，自己心里也没什么底。所以麻烦您帮我批改下这篇文章，看大概能拿多少分，我好有个底。也请老师帮忙指出，如果想要得到7分，我的文章最应该在哪方面改进呢？非常感谢！

老师您好，麻烦指出其中的不足，谢谢！

Topic:  Some people prefer to spend their free time outdoors. Other people prefer to spend their leisure time indoors. Would you prefer to be outside or would you prefer to be inside for your leisure activities? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your choice.

要求6分，可是感觉自己距离这个6很远，麻烦老师给一下意见~~

Some people say university students should pay for their tuition fees. Some others say government should pay for tuition fee ,  What is your opinion?

It is a great controversy whether university graduates should pay their tuition fees or not. Some are in favor of affording tuition by students. Some assert that government should help individuals paying tuition fees. From my perspective, it depends on individuals' circumstances.

Due to high tuition fees, most of poor families cannot afford to send their children for further education. In this case, government should finance students' degree. Students, for instance, can be provided tuition waivers in university period. Whereas students who come from rich socio-economic families should pay their tuition by themselves or their families totally. For these fees can apply to eqquiping with well teachers and good facilities.

On the other hand, for excellent students, government should provide some scholarships to reduce their load of finance. Thus, not only  can they be ecouraged to contitue their studies, but also it is able to arouse their interest in academic. Furthermore, it would enable to train more manpower for a country or the world over.

In  addition, government should provide jobs for university students as possible as it can. Unquestionably this is a win-win proposal that students can combinate theory with practice, and they can pay a part of tuition using the money they earn simultaneously.

All in all, I believe that government should try its best to help the university students who trap in financial difficulties or stand out their talent.

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents,for instance for sport or music,and others are not.However,it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The competition in modern society is increasingly stiff, which makes many parents extremely anxious about their kids’ future.  As a result, adults tend to train their baby in various ways. They send their children to attend all kinds of schools regardless of expensive costs they may charge. Just hoping one day their little girls or boys may grow up to be a successful man. Yet there is a heated discussion about whether any children can be taught to be a celebrity.

The world is full of endless possibilities, there must be some people who are born with certain talents, which palys an important role in a person’s life-time. The prime reason is that these kind of person will perform better than others who are not intelligent , which will definitely gain our genius’ confidence . Consequently, their interests can be raised . AS I believe that interests are the best teacher for kids ,without it ,it is hard for children to learn things well ,they can not devote in doing it . Another reason is that children with their talents will grasp new ideas fast, which I consider is quite efficiency. They can benefit from their talents a lot. For instance, their special talents can save them a lot of time ,and they see their certain ability as a natural gift from god, they will love it and feel happy about it. Since they get a happy mood, they will tend to love the world where they live and have a positive attitude towards life , which is very essential for a kid’s health.

Having said that,others believe that any child can be trained to be an excellent sports person or musician, which I seriously doubt it. If a person who does not have any mathematical cells, for exemple, an idiot, how can you teach them to be a mathematician? Obviously, some normal persons can get an access to the specific field by teaching them how. If they are lack of interests, it is easy for them to get bored instead of sticking to it. It is impossible for them to achieve higher goals, not to mention being a good sports person or musician; therefore, people may be taught to be better but not everyone.

All taken into consideration, my view is that to become a genius, one must have special talents which is considered very important for a man’s life . Besides that, with the help of suitable training methods, they can be even better.

 谢谢老师